Well, today’s Blogging 101 assignment is to create a post for our ideal reader (but no pressure). So, if you happen to be my ideal reader, you will think this little bit up here is terribly witty, and the poem below is moving or brilliant or any number of other positive adjectives. I’m not fussy. And you would also work in the field of publishing, and want to pay me to publish this, along with some of my other work, in a real book (as opposed to a make-believe one). Because even though all of us writer-types like to blog, we really want our words in real, paper and ink books. So, here that poem:
Generally when one tries to tinker
with eternity
it does not end well.
The stoutest knots
come undone,
and ends once again
flap loose.
But still there is this
hope
for a sense of
grand purpose,
or at least a
reason to get up each morning,
to brush one’s teeth,
to wash,
to put on one’s shoes,
and so on.
And in the meantime
one goes on,
for there are children to be fed
and dishes to be washed
and bills to be paid,
despite the
receding hallway filled
with an overflow of empty boxes
and failed attempts.
And sometimes,
amid the clutter and minutia,
without realizing it,
we get the lighting
and the composition right,
and just sometimes in our wake
we leave something
beautiful.
I love the ‘tinkering with eternity’ phrase and ‘The stoutest knots come undone,and ends once again flap loose,” as well as the sentiment at the end. Sometimes, sometimes we get it right.
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I love the way this flows. Nice job! I will be posting some poetry soon. Hope you can check it out! I appreciate any and all feedback!
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Lots of deep meaning in this poem, very nice. I hope to see more of your poems if this one is anything to go by.
https://cmirandajoy.wordpress.com/
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Thank you! There’s more to come. 🙂
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Love your poem- feels very intimate and honest. Just love the portrait too- a beautiful illustration of your writing
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Thank you Lynn!
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Mary,
Great poem, like from one of the masters’.
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Thanks very much Susie!
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Wonderful poem Mary.. sometimes I think that writing is like using gold-digger’s pan to find those nuggets of gold among the silt that constitute the perfect poem.. I think that’s what we do in blogging. Your poem has a nice and hopeful progression that I like… it’s exactly how we should look upon life.. finding reason.
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Thank you Bjorn! I agree about the writing process. And sometimes we have to sift though more dirt than others to get a nugget or two, lol.
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Nice way with words there. Nice enough for me to click follow…
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Thank you Curtis, and I’ve done likewise. 🙂
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Nice poem!
@ othermary,
I have my poem based on ‘detachment’ faced 😦
Hope you like it.. Would love feedback as you write poetry too:)
https://shrutiinsights.wordpress.com/2015/02/11/walk-away/
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You really capture the difficult feelings in this kind of situation. Some parts of this almost read like music lyrics. 🙂
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Aww.. thank you!
Poems are like pouring your heart out on a paper!
Glad you liked it
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Lovely flow of words here and very simple but deep. Keep it coming.
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Thank you! I will. :o)
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