Whisper to me
through the veil tonight
when shades and shadows
dance cheek to cheek
as curtains flutter
and shutters creak
Tip the urn
spill your secrets
let me feel your breath
like ashes blowing
against my neck
Tell me all
I cannot know
of ways and whys,
impossible skies
meant for only sightless eyes
This is for the writing prompt 55+ from the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. We were asked to write 55 words about Halloweeney sorts of things. Click on the link and check it out.
Wow–this is a very visceral sort of poem, Mary–the breeze like ashes against the neck and the impossible skies for sightless eyes–wonderful sounds and imagery. Thanks. k.
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Thank you, Karin.
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I love the second stanza–it is truly chilling and leads perfectly into the close, which reminds me of the seers and oracles who speak with the dead–at a price. Happy Samhain, Mary.
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Dance cheek to cheek…I love it!
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Thank you Ayala. xx
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This is a beautiful poem. I love the touches of rhyme. It flows so well and is really melodic.
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Thank you Kerry. Your comment is…reassuring. I wondered about the rhume, if I should do either more or less.
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I love the gentleness with which you connect the living and the dead… the veil was thin tonight, the way you worked with urns and ash is a great conceit for not mentioning the death by name.
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Thank you Bjorn. I did try to keep from being too heavy handed.
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Yes, yes, yes! Love this.
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Thank you MZ!
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intense and passionate. love it.
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Thanks Natasa
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Lovely… secrets spilled from an urn, ack.
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Haha, thanks Marian.
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the myth in it startles me,
beautiful 55.
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Thank you.
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“through the veil tonight”… Adore that as the realm between the two realms really is as thin as a veil…. I love this – the lilting back and forth of the words – just perfect for All Hallows Eve.
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Thanks Margaret!
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I read your poem. Took a deep breath. Read your poem again. And smiled. I love the request, the sensations these lines evoke, the feelings it inspires… Wonderful!
Have a delightful week! ♥
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Thank you so much Magaly.
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Lots of mushy stuff passes when two dance cheek to cheek. Just what we love to hear.
I think there was about to be a kiss on the neck or other physical play when the 55 was used up. 😋
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Haha – Jim!
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Makes me shiver – in the nicest way.
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Thank you Rosemary.
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I love the hubble bubble of this wonderful poem – it flows beautifully and magically – also love your new website..and good to see you back at the prompt sites
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Thank you Jae.
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Nicely done. A fine Halloween incantation.
Steve K
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Thank you, Steve.
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